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AuthorWhite Swan's avatar

Beautifully captures that bittersweet ache of unspoken love Well written

Niraj Pancholi's avatar

Thank you for the compliment. You are right, bittersweet ache is where I was going with it.

Complicated & Unfiltered's avatar

Very beautiful 😍

But it makes me think of the concept of men and women, how differently we recieve things. Men fall in love with a woman's beauty and women fall in love with what a man's words.

So women wear makeup and men lie.

I don't make the rules. Lol

Niraj Pancholi's avatar

Hi A. Hartdegen, thank you for sharing your thoughts! Yes, this poem is from a point of view of a man. Now, your comment has made me think to write a poem from a perspective of a woman in a similar situation. My poem 'Someone Shall Come Along' has a young girl's perspective, but not this situation. Thank you for inspiring me with your comment and your own creative writing!

Complicated & Unfiltered's avatar

Thank you

Although I tried to polish my comment.. lol

Niraj Pancholi's avatar

Okay, got it. I see the polish :)